My braces were hurting very bad
Through the day, I was very sad
They hurt so much I could not eat
I had trouble falling to sleep
My braces hurt like the color red
It's deadly, dangerous, as it is said
My braces don't hurt that much that more
Now i have to get rid of all these gum sores
My son can relate so well. Great use of feedback as you wrote this poem. I am very impressed by the way you took the feedback and still were able to make your own piece of writing. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteHey, Jared. Nice songs. I hope you don't mind if
ReplyDeleteI borrow about half of them. Thanks a lot, pal!